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[Luci]

ok so heres a snippet for the end of a chapter im currently writing. i wanna know what u think so, here goes:

My feet touched the soft, plush material of the beige mat placed next to the bathtub. A chilled sensation ran down my spine as i fully stepped out of the tub. I grabbed my towel and toweled off.

Eventually i emerged from the bathroom, it was about 12:30 am and the whole hotel room, except from the dim lighting in the bathroom, was dark.

"Coco?" I called out into darkness. No answer.I called out again and still no answer.

My toes sunk into the carpet as i walked across the living room and turned on the lamp. A light glow filled the room, and i found her. A form of a body layed limply on the couch, turned on its side, with its chest rising and falling.

Coco only had on a pair or striped capri pajama pants and the matching tank, and i knew that i was cold. So i went into the bedroom and grabbed the small cover off of the end of the bed.

Neatly tucking her in, i moved a few strands of hair away from her face and tucked them behind her ear. "coco dulce de suenos."

My phone lay on the table, with the screen flashing. I picked it up and noticed i had 3 missed calls. All from Cory. I took one last look at Coco before turning the light off, walking into the bedroom, and closing the door behind me so i wouldnt disturb her sleep.

My toes slid up and down the soft sheets as i moved my legs around, trying to ease my anxiety. The phone was on it's third ring and i was this close to hanging up, that is until a groggy voice came over the line.

"Hello?"
"Hey Cory, its me," I said bringing my index fingers' nail up to my mouth.
"Micah?"
"Yeah, baby its me."

Silence filled the line and, my heat thumped in my chest. I held the phone close to my ear before placing my head in my hands. I bit on my lip as i listened to him sigh. His voice...full of emotion.

"Micah, i dont know why you left the other night but, you know i love you and i would never force you."
"Yeah i know Cory, but it wasnt that....."
"Then what was it? I dont understand, what did i do?"
"Cory, it wasnt you. It's me and what im feeling at the moment. I just.." I said before swallowing hard.
"Micah, i know things havent been very good lately. But, baby im trying and i love you. I want you and i know that i hurt you. But, i just couldnt take it if we were to split..."
"Cory im not saying that...i just need...we need space..that's all. Im not in a very happy place and it doesnt even feel like im myself. Lately my life has been going through some changes and i dont know if i can handle all of this."
"What changes? I havent changed. Im still me, your still you. Were still together. I still love you, you still love me...right?"
I bit down on my lip harder. I knew this feeling. Tears threatened to come. I brought my knees up to my chest and buried my face. Soft cries escaped my mouth as i cried inevetably. This was the worst feeling ever.

I took the phone away from my ears and pressed end. I couldnt take it anymore. I slid down under the covers and laid on my side. Tears pouring down my cheeks and onto the pillowcase.

I shut my eyes tight hoping to rid myself of the remaining tears. But, all i saw were flash backs of ous from our first date, first kiss, etc. Thats why the tears came harder. "Is this is?" i thought aloud to noone in paticular.

"Is what it?" Coco asked slowly walking over to the bed and sitting down on the edge. I looked at her, and wiped away a few tears from my eyes.“Have you ever felt like.. you woke up one day, and everything had changed, without asking you first if it were okay? Like, all of a sudden everything you once knew and trusted was just… gone?”
"Your talking about Cory, am i right?" she asked looking at me. Her grey eyes grew a shad darker as they filled with concern.
"Look Meijah, if all this relationship is doing to you is making you cry then, is it really worth it?" She began wiping at a few tears.
I shrugged my shoulders as an answer.
"Do you love him?"
I stared into her eyes because i knew she already knew the answer. She and i both knew that i loved him but...i didnt love him as much anymore. Thats why it hurts so bad. Corey has my heart and he stomped all over it for the past few months, but now he's suddenly a changed person. I dont know what to do.
"You cant make a decision unless your honest with yourself first." Coco smiled and tapped my nose with her index finger.
"Thanks Coco." I smiled back. "Your always there when i need you."
"No problem, were best friends.Casi hermanas . I'll always be there for you. whenever you need me because you know i got yo back.."
"Enough to jump Corey?" i joked.
"Yeah girl" she smiled. "Me,pookey,, and ray ray gon get some vaseline and we gon go beat him down!"
We both laughed as we pictured it. I didnt know what i would do at the moment if Coco would have never woke her sleepy butt up.

Back in L.A at my house
As soon as i had hung up the phone Corey had jumped in his car and sped over to my house. No cars were in the driveway, noone was home.
That's when it hit him. It was over. Our relationship was over and it was only a matter of time before we both had to deal with it.

Truthfully for the past few months we both had been grasping whatever was left. There was nothing. What used to be love had broken apart and flew away in the wind. It's over.

Corey sat in his car looking at my bedroom window, hoping i would look out. But, i didnt. And for the first time in years.....Cory cried. A few tears streamed down his cheeks and he wiped them away quickly.

Memories flooded his head as more tears came. After our first date Corey had driven me home and walked me to the door. But, we didnt kiss. W e just hugged before i walked in the house and he left.

Only, neither of us could sleep that night. Corey drove back over my house and threw rocks at my bedroom window until my light came on and i looked out.

"Hey" i smiled. Corey smiled back and motioned for me to come down.

A few moments later, i crept out of the front door in nothing but a pair of boyshorts and a camisole.

I walked over to him and he grabbed me in his arms. "I forgot to tell you something" he smiled. I searched his hazel eyes. "What?"

"This." Thats when our lips met for the first time and it was perfect. We had never experienced anything like it and for it to be between us was to good to be true.

Now look at us. We realized....the two 15 yr olds who shared their first kiss only a few months ago,were now no longer in love. That spark was gone. That love was gone. Maybe it never was love, we just thought so. Thats life for you.

Corey wiped away his tears before turning on the car and driving away into the night.

Where'd you go?
I miss you so,
Seems like it's been forever,
That you've been gone.
Where'd you go?
I miss you so,
Seems like it's been forever,
That you've been gone,
Please come back home...
Please come back home...
Please come back home...
Please come back home...
Please come back home...

Real emotional i think...leave comments plz thx.
.::TheV.I.PPrincess::.

[NYMo100]

Dat was good! I really like it, 'cause it has alot of detail!!!

[vacationgirl36]

It was good, but I think a little too much detail can choke a story.
Example: Neatly tucking her in, i moved a few strands of hair away from her face and tucked them behind her ear. "coco dulce de suenos." --- And tucked them behind her ear ( don't think that was needed.) - Ya know? But all in all, I enjoyed reading it....

[Luci]

yea thats one of my problems i add 2 much detail but thx ya'll for the advice. i gotta work on tha detail problem...thx!

.::The V.I.P Princess::.

[Luci]

New Chapter

Chapter 22

"What are you doing today?" Coco yawned as she headed towards the bathroom. "Well i got this letter last night" i said. "What letter?" "Well when i got home yesterday, there was a letter on the coffee table." I tossed the cream envelope onto the bed. Just as i thought Coco grabbed it and pulled the letter from the envelope. "Oh its from Cory." "Well he wants me to meet him at the beach tonight, what do you think i should do?" I asked. "Well i say, dont go because your going to come home crying or something," Coco scratched her head. "Do you think you should go?" I walked over to the window and crossed my arms across my chest. Coco waited silently for an answer. But, i couldnt give her one. I wanted to go but, i knew if i told her then she would just call me crazy. And i didnt feel like hearing her mouth and her "IMPORTANT OPINIONS." Eventhough i did just ask for one, Coco can be a little thingyy and ignorant sometimes.

"Im not going" i lied. I could almost feel a smile cross over Coco's face. "So what are you going to do?" Coco asked. "I guess im going to be around hang around here for awhile."

Coco jumped off the bed and sighed. "Well im going to go get in a few hours of shopping, call me if you want anything." I didnt reply, so Coco went into the bathroom and shut the door. I had no clue what i was going to do until 8:00. So i laid down on the bed and stared at the ceiling.

KNOCK-KNOCK-KNOCK! My eyes popped open to the sound of the light tapping on the door. I looked out at the window and the sun was setting. "How long have i been asleep?" I thought. I wiped some sleep from my eyes and checked the clock on my phone. "6:30." KNOCK-KNOCK-KNOCK. "Im coming!" I scratched the back of my head, letting a few strands of hair escape my sloppy bun.

I stood on my tip-toes to see who was on the other side of the door. It was Zoe. "Zoe? What does she want?" I asked. I pulled open the door and Zoe burst inside. "Well hi to you to" i said shutting the door. Zoe was already in the living room on the couch by the time i turned around.

"Not that i dont enjoy the visit, because i really d-" i said sitting down. "Wait!" Zoe smiled. "I have great news." "Well, what is it?" I leaned back against the couch arm.

Zoe pulled a manilla envelope out and handed it to me. "Whats this?' I asked. "Its-"Zoe started. She looked around with a very confused look on her face. "Wheres Coco?" She asked. "Shopping." "Oh! Well i kinda wanted you two to open it together." "I'll show her when she gets back, but first what is this?" "Open it and see." I looked at Zoe who still had a smile on her face.

I opened up the envelope and pulled out a stack of photos. They were the pictures from our photo shoot. "Wow, they got these back quick" i stared at the first one of Coco and i together. "Yeah, but dont you look so cute" Zoe smiled. "You two look perfect!" "Yeah they must have edited them alot!" I flipped to the next picture. "No not really, just a little airbrushing and voila! You have perfect pictures!" Zoe laughed.

I gasped at one paticular picture. "Is that...is that me?" I asked staring at the picture. "Lemme see" Zoe plucked the photo out of my hands and flipped it on the back. "Yup, it says Micah." I snatched the picture out of her hands and put it back in the pile. "What are you doing?" I put the pictures back in the envelope and ran to my room to get my cell. "Wh-" Zoe tried to ask but she had to pause when she saw me walk out with my cell phone up to my ear. "Coco! You will not believe what i have" i shouted once she answered the phone. "What do you have? A dozen roses, a card, balloons?" she guessed. "No, this doesnt even have anything to do with Cory." "Ok, so spill!"

I went into full detail of Zoe's unexpected visit and the pictures as i explained to Coco. "I have to see them!" "Well ill come meet you, where are you?" I asked. "Victoria Secret." "For what-Never mind that, see you in a few!" Click! I hung up the phone and went into my room to change. I quickly put on a sparkly denim mini skirt, a blue embroidered trim top, and a pair of gold braided sandals.

"Let's go!" i shut the door to the bedroom. "You dress fast." "Let's go!" i literally pulled Zoe up from the couch and dragged her along to the door. After pushing her out and locking the door i dragged her to the elevators.

Coco had apparently taken the limo and the friver so i had to drive with Zoe. "Nice car." I pulled open the door of Zoe's red brand new honda civic. "Thanks, its new." Once we were buckled in Zoe, started up the car and we drove off.

"So who is Cory?" Zoe asked. I laughed and shook my head, "Boyfriend." "Is he cute?" Zoe smiled. "You know he gotta be cute, or im not messing with him" i joked. "Nah im just playing, but yeah he straight." "Yeah i know, you seem like the type of girl who has high standards." "I'am but, i do lower them once and a while. And thats why i think im never going to lower them anymore." "Why?" "Long story" i brushed her off. "Ok." I turned the knob on the sterio and "Run it" blasted from the stereo.

We pulled up in front of the Victoria Secret boutique and Zoe turned the car off. "Do you see the limo?" I asked Zoe. Silence fell over the car for a moment. "Yeah there it is" she pointed out. Sure enough, the silver chrysler limo was a few cars ahead. "Let's go." I opened the door and casually walked through the crowd, down the street,and to the limo.

I knocked on the tinted window of the back door and, Coco opened the door. "Come on," i said waving for Zoe to climb in behind me. Since Zoe was the closest to the door, she had to close it before we could continue.

"Where are they?!' Coco squealed. "I think the-" i started to unzip my purse. Coco grabbed it off of my lap and unzipped it herself. She rummaged through lip-gloss, nail files, my wallet, gum, and some other knick knacks before coming across the manilla envelope.

She basically tore it open in excitement. "Coco calm down, their only pictures." Coco didnt listen though, she was too excited looking at the pictures. "Ahhh i look so pretty!" Coco screamed. I cleared my throat. "I mean we look so pretty" Coco smirked.

After Coco finished looking at the picture she was back to her normal self. "So wanna go in?" I asked staring at the building through the tinted window. "Of course" Zoe smiled. "Sure" Coco agreed.

WE walked inside the store and browsed around. I wasnt really intrested in finding any clothes so i shopped around the pajama section. Zoe walked by me while talking on her cell phone. I heard little bits and pieces of her conversation. "Video shoot tomorrow?!....Why....they just learned the dance...ok ill let them know." Zoe walked over to me. "Where's Coco i have to tell you two something really important." "Ok, i think she's in the dressing rooms."

"Coco?!" I called out once we were inside the hallways of the dressing room. "Yeah?" someone called back. "Coco! Are you in here?' I called out again looking around the cream colored room. "Over here!" I saw a hand wave over the door of the last booth. "Oh there you are" i breathed. I sat down on the little chair in a corner that was near her booth. "Im almost done, be out in a minute!" "Well hurry, I just heard a little of Zoe's phone call and it seems like an emergency." "What about?" A flmsy baby blue dress tossed onto the door of her booth. "I dont know, thats why you need to hurry so she can tell us." "One more outfit."

The door to her booth opened and Coco stepped out in a yellow, flowing, halter dress. "How do you like this?" she asked twirling around. "Its cute now lets go!" I said. Coco frowned. "Ok no need to whine!" Coco stomped back into the booth, and hurried to change back into her clothes. I shook my head and stared at myself in the floor to ceiling mirror a few feet away from me. I looked so sad which would be weird because your normal person would be excited that they just signed a recording contract, just had a photo shoot, and had everything going for her.

Coco emergerd from the booth with a armful of clothes, and her purse on her arm. "Let's go." I picked my purse up off the floor and followed behind Coco to the cash register. Zoe waited patiently by the entrance watching people walk in and out. Coco paid her money and then we gathered around Zoe. "There's a little smoothie shack down the street, i'll tell you there." I was getting a headache from all of this moving around, and stress. I covered my eyes to sheild them from the sun as we weaved in and out of the crowds to get to the "Smoothie Shop."

Ding! The bell over the silver door rang as we stepped inside the 50's themed smoothie shop. "Blast From the past, much?" Coco pushed her sunglasses onto the top of her head. All three of us chuckled to ourself as a teenage waitress literally skated over to us. Coco and i were in a fit of hysteria and we didnt want to seem mean so we turned away. "Can we get a booth in the back please?" Zoe asked the waitress. "Sure, kid menus?" the girl eyed Coco and me.

As soon as we heard that comment we straightened up and rolled our eyes. "Follow me" the girl turned on the wheels of her skates and led us to an empty booth.

She dropped three menus on the little red table and skated away. "Loser" i said putting up both of my hands and making loser signs with them. "Stop being so petty" Zoe scowled. "Stop being so petty" i mimicked. Coco giggled at the sight of us being so kiddy.

Actually it was really stupid so we all started laughing. "Ok time to get serious" Zoe waved her hand in our faces so we could calm down. I tossed my long dark hair over my shoulders and took a deep breath. Zoe motioned for us to lean in close. "Ok this is really important so open your ears and pay attention." Silence fell over our table but, it was broken when Zoe began speaking. "Well i recieved a call today from the office and they told me that your video shoot has been moved up." "What?! We just did a photo shoot!" Coco said. "That is so unfair!" I whined. Zoe popped her head above the group to check to see if anyone was eavesdropping. When she saw noone was she sat back down.

"Hear me out," she said. "Were listening." "Well, your video shoot has been moved up because you have a spot for a interveiw on 106 & Park!" Zoe squealed. "Are you serious?!" i broke out into a big smile. "Dead serious! So now are you mad?" Zoe asked. Her dark brown eyes sparkled in the sunlight that poured through the window. "No" i said. Zoe's eye brows crinkled up into a state of confusion.

"Come again?" Zoe stuttered out. "Yeah come again!" Coco blurted out. "No, im not mad, im excited!" I stood up and shouted. Everyone in the shop turned towards our table and all you could hear was the cheesy 50's music playing in the background. I smiled nervously and sunk back into the sticky leather material of the booth.

The sweet taste of a strawberry smoothie hit my tastebuds and it was so refreshing. "This is so good!" i smiled. "My cookie tastes better" Coco broke off a piece of her oatmeal cookie and gave it to me. "The cookie is good but, i still say my smoothie is delicious."

"Well we better get going" Zoe said finishing up a scoop of her ice cream sundae. "Yeah, big day tomorrow" i smiled. "Which means you two need to look gorgeous."

I was about to reach into my purse, when Zoe pulled out a twenty dollar bill. "Dont be crazy, let me pay." I shrugged and pulled my purse strap back up onto my shoulders.

"Do you need a ride back to the hotel?" Zoe asked standing up. "Uh no, the limo is still outside right?" I looked at Coco. "Of course." "Well then were all set" i said standing up. Zoe leaned forward and gave me friendly hug. "Thank you for everything and i cant wait to see you tomorrow." "Same doll" Zoe said in her best french accent. Coco gave her a hug and then Zoe walked towards the door. "Ciao Bella!" Zoe called over her shoulders before leaving out.

Later on...

Once Coco and i were back at the hotel we decided to kick back on the couches and watch television. Ring-Ring-Ring! I looked over at the coffee table and grabbed my cell phone. "Hello?" I asked. "Hey baby, what up?" Cory's voice came over the speaker on my phone. "Nothing, just sitting down and watching a movie." "Thats cool, so what about tonight?" his voice sounded worried. "Im sorry Cory, i have a big video shoot tomorrow and its really important." "Well thats ok i guess, maybe we can plan something for another time" he sighed. I felt bad for turning down the date but, i had a video shoot! This was my career and i cant miss my first video shoot.

"Well..maybe you can come to the shoot with me. It'd be fun" I suggested. "Yeah i guess i can make it, see you tomorrow." "Bye" i pressed end on the phone and dialed my mothers phone number.

"Mom did you hear about the video shoot?" I screamed into the phone. "Yes Micah, were getting the outfits and things ready right now. I'll see you tomorrow, ok?" my mother tried to rush me off the phone. "Alright." Click! My mother hung up on me! I closed the phone and threw it back onto the coffee table.

"Coco i think im gonna go to bed early" i said getting up from the couch. "Yeah ok" Coco stuffed a handfull of Popcorn into her mouth with her eyes still on the t.v screen. Popcorn kernels spilled all over her lap and the couch.

I shook my head and walked into the darkness of our bedroom. I made a little sound as i threw myself onto the seat next to my window. I began humming as i stared at the night sky. I smiled at the sight and touched the cold glass . A night draft suddenly hit me and my hair began blowing up around my face. My hazel eyes danced and sparkled with the stars. Who knew life could be so sweet? A weak smile spread across my face as if i didnt want anyone to see. "Twinkle twinkle little star......"

Ya know you love me
.::The V.I.P Princess::.

[Luci]

New Chapter!

We pulled down the very crowded circular block somewhere in the bronx newyork. "Whoa, look at all these people!" I said looking out the window with my vanilla frappuccino in my hand. I saw Zoe running across the street slowly in her skinny jeans, designer tee-shirt, and some pumps.

"Hey ladies, how are you?" Zoe asked opening the door. "Fine Zoe" we both said. "Well im gonna skip the small talk and get down to buisness." "We have alot to do today and we have long hours, so we need to get you in wardrobe and make-up, and you need to practice with laurie ann if nessecary." I took a sip of my drink. "Ok well lets go" i scooted across the leather seat and Zoe helped me out of the car.

There was alot of hoodrich people around there. Throwback jerseys, airforce ones, grills, gold chains. You know, the usual. But, i was no stranger to it, we werent always rich you know. When we stepped out of the car some people turned around and looked at us. Some of them even waved like they knew who we were. But, i guess since there was a big banner up that read "Micah and Coco-How We Roll."

A couple of people waved as we walked across the camera covered, equipment covered, and people covered street. But of course most of the girls were to busy primping their hair and trying to fix their outfit. "Are our back up dancers here?" Coco asked. "Yeah, they arrived with Laurie Ann, their in hair and make-up." Zoe stuffed her hands into the back of her pants as she led us to the trailer positioned in a drive-way.

"Hi everybody" i greeted as we walked up the three stairs. "Finally your here" my mother said with a hint of relief. "Yeah were here, so what do yall want us to do?" "Well there is some salads over there in that bag, eat that, and then you'll be in hair and make-up" my mother directed. Coco grabbed the plastic bag and sat it on a table in the corner. "Chicken ceaser" Coco sang as she handed mine to me.

"You are so dumb." "Yeah well you and everybody else love me anywayz" Coco moved her fork around in the air with every word. "if you say so."

I quickly finished my salad and before i knew it i was sitting in a chair getting my hair done by Yakima. "This is going to be so cute on you." Yakima popped her gum as she begin braiding a long braid across the top of my head. "Ouch." I began flinching in my chair. "Girl stop it, you know that dont hurt" my mother scolded. "She never enjoyed getting her hair braided." I rolled my eyes. My mother means no harm, but she loves telling peoples buisness sometimes. (www.msn.com, search long hairstyles)

Yakima began starting on the second braid. Miah and Travis entered the trailer. Miah had a camcorder in her hand and it was recording. "What are you doing?" I asked raising my eyebrow. "Recording your first video shoot, im documenting." I smiled and cleared my throat. "I would like to give a shout-out to all of my fans, and to the academy" i said in my best french diva accent. "I always wanted to be a video girl. I wanted to know Jay-Z. I wanted to be with the ballers and shot callers." Everyone burst out laughing.

"Boy please" Coco's voice traveled throughout the trailer. I suppose travis was over there flirtin. "Girl dont be shady, you know you want T-Mac." "No i want a big mac and not a whopper jr" Coco put the lid back on her salad. "Girl dont front." "Whatever Travis."

"Travis leave that girl alone, you see she dont wanna be bothered with you" my mother handed a bobby pin to Yakima. "Have any of ya'll seen Cory?" I asked taking my cell phone off the clip. Everyone shook their heads no. "He's supposed to be hear" I began going down the contacts list. "Call him" Coco disposed of her salad in the trash can. I didnt reply. I put my cell phone back on the clip and clasped my hands in my lap.

"Yakima she needs to get in wardrobe hurry along." Zoe paced back and forth occasionly checking her red diamond guess watch.

Comments:
I know their long but i wanna know what ya'll think about it, all critisizm is welcome so thx if u do comment on it.

.::The V.I.P Princess::.

[NYMo100]

haaaaaaayyyyyyy, NEW YORK, thas my state!
"Yes I'm from NEW YORK, NEW YORK"
and I gotsta represent Harlem(in manhattan), Queenz, Da Boogie Down Bronx(whyever the hell they call it that) Brooklyn, and Staten Island.

(I know dis wuz random, but I wuz really bored, and when I was reading ur story you mentioned New York sooo.... I just wrote dat)

[sishxy06]

Hey, hun? can i b honest? I didn't read the whole way thru, but wat i did read showed me u got amazing talent! But plz, plz plz don't give away the whole story yet...hold on,: r u puttin these up on the exchange, or are they just 4 ourz personal enjoyment?

*~*EvaSpaztik*~*

[Luci]

personal enjoyment cuz actually...this is a book that iam in the process of writing and soon publishing ;D

[sishxy06]

Okay, then. Better 2 make money off a real book than sell urself out 2 TS2.com, ryt? I wish u luck, gurl! How close r u 2 finishin?

*

[Luci]

not even close lol what u just read was from VERSION #5 of this book lol

[jjrob]

extremely well done. Luci u r an excellent writer. I would luv to read ur book once it gets published. u got talent grl.

[.:crazybeautiful:.]

good job with taking your talent off of the sims and spilling into real life. i'm too lazy to do the work of getting published. plus i think i still need some work. words of wisdom- stay focused. you are your own worst critique.

& most importantly, F the haters, get that dirt off ur shoulder.

[Luci]

thx yall. Oh check out my story that i posted here:
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