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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 13:59:17 GMT -5
Okay, I'm going to be starting No Daddy Today and I need help with what part 3 should be about. I just want part 3 to be adventurous and very emotional. I also want Jada to meet her soon to be step dad in part 3. So, can someone please help me!  |
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Post by jjrob on Mar 17, 2006 14:02:36 GMT -5
Don't rush wit it. Take ur time. Trust me, it works. Don't put one sentence on a slide. It jus draws the story out.
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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 14:03:41 GMT -5
Okay, thanks. But can you help me on what part 3 should be about?
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Post by jjrob on Mar 17, 2006 14:14:56 GMT -5
Like...hmm......In part 2 it said dat Jada's Ma wuz gettin married. Try to show Jada's response to dis. Wuz she pissed? Wuz she overjoyed? Also let her show her emotions. Did she begin to ignore her mother? For example:(u don't hav use dis, jus tryna say my point)
Before I knew it, I was outside, in the freezing cold. The weather seemed to match my mood because I could see Thunderclouds forming. I knew I should have went back inside to confront her. The woman in there who is my so called mother. But I couldn't. I just wanted the rain to come and the lightning to strike. I was that pissed.
U see what I mean? Let the character be herself. Think what Jada would do. eventually, slowly let the soon to be stepfather into the scene. What's Jada's reaction?
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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 14:18:44 GMT -5
Okay thanks! I'm going to use this line in one of the pages, most likely page one. Also, when can I have the adventurous part in the story because a little bit at the ending, I'm going to show the new father and I'm going to put her reaction to it.
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Post by jjrob on Mar 17, 2006 14:20:35 GMT -5
Hmmmm...........what did u hav in mind for the adventurous part? (I hope u don't mind me asking)
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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 14:24:20 GMT -5
Well, I was thinking about Jada having time to think about her mothers decision while spending time with her girl Mariah and her god child, Michelle. I was thinking they went somewhere (You can help me on where they go) and something bad happens where it contains her new step dad, but she doesn't know it.
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Post by jjrob on Mar 17, 2006 14:38:45 GMT -5
Hmm...Okay, I think I got it. what if Jada gets into more trouble than usual? She starts gettin an attitude and what not, which builds up to Mariah and Michelle takin Jada out to somewhere special. Maybe Jada recognizes the place. Maybe she had been there as kid. Maybe it's where she has the only memory of her daddy, before he left. U hav to decide that for urself. (The place could be the park, probaly at night(do build up the ddrama), or a theme park. U hav to decide)
After u choose the place, choose what happens according to where u r. Like if ur at da park, at night, maybe they don't eachother and he attempts/ does rape her. Or maybe something happens to Michelle, traumitizing the girl. Again, u hav to decide. I don't want to give u a story plot, it's not my story.
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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 14:42:20 GMT -5
Okay, I know what you are saying and you have some amazing ideas! I'm going to use the ideas u have said and put it in my story. The daddy part was nice and I'm definatley adding that to my story. Later at the end, Jada is going to come home and try to tell her mother what had happened and then what?
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Post by jjrob on Mar 17, 2006 14:51:42 GMT -5
Maybe her mother believes her, since they both don't know exactly who the person was. Maybe she dosen't believe her. Maybe Jada saw his face but didn't KNOW HIM, and recognizes him when he marries her mother. Maybe u can hav the weddin in da next chapter, do build up the drama. Maybe u could end it with Jada crying bout what had happened that night. Maybe u could say that it was Jada's first time cryin since her daddy left her. Maybe u could say Jada drew within herself and didn't speak to anybody for a while. Again, it's up to u.
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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 14:54:36 GMT -5
I agree! Okay, thanks for the help. Girl, I wouldn't have any idea what I'd do if I didn't have ya help. THanks again!
Ya girl, Zozo
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Post by jjrob on Mar 17, 2006 14:57:18 GMT -5
Ur welcome. I cant wait til it comes out! I know u'll do a good job on it!
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Post by Zoe on Mar 17, 2006 14:58:40 GMT -5
Thanx! I believe in myself and I know I will too.
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Post by Lady Jizzle on Jul 3, 2006 12:41:13 GMT -5
As I begin to process my first attempt at a SIMstory (NOT COUNTING A LEGACT BOMB!) I have realized some of my faults. I suck at making attractive male SIMS! I suck badly. So I am looking for some help on either creating some cute guys or actually having someone create them for me.(OF COURSE YOU WILL GET CREDIT FOR IT...even if it is just a suggestion!).
The title of the story is "The Absence of Everything" It centers around a high profile business woman or model (not sure of her profession yet...SUGGESTIONS WANTED!) who has everything to others and nothing to herself (is that understandable?). The sacrifice she made to obtain nothing....was everything!
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